<p style="text-align: justify;"><img style="width: 808px; height: 61px; margin-left: auto; margin-right: auto; float: none;" src="https://info.compassedu.hk/sucai/content/1679471298570/1679471298570.png" width="808" height="61" /></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><a href="http://pnemnih.cn/adviser_16318_1" target="_blank" rel="noopener"><span style="text-decoration: underline; color: #1890ff;">史雯娟</span></a></p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #666666;">簡介：2021年度&ldquo;妙筆生花獎&rdquo;，擅長商科和文社科方向?qū)懽鳎哂胸S富文書寫作經(jīng)驗(yàn)及深厚的英語語言功底，以專業(yè)及個性化的文書幫助學(xué)員斬獲LSE、IC、 HKU、NUS等名校offer</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">在準(zhǔn)備文書素材的時候，很多同學(xué)會發(fā)現(xiàn)，面對跨申或者和本科專業(yè)聯(lián)系不大的專業(yè)時，<strong>自己的校內(nèi)外經(jīng)歷與申請項(xiàng)目匹配度并不高或甚至完全不匹配</strong>。在這種情況下，如何從有限的經(jīng)歷中挖掘出與目標(biāo)項(xiàng)目適配的部分，與上下文形成邏輯上緊密的連結(jié)則成為了文書整體完成度的關(guān)鍵。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">今天#<strong>心動的文書</strong>#欄目，將與大家探尋如何從新的角度挖掘與申請專業(yè)相關(guān)度不高的素材，以將personal statement形成思路通順合理的整體。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">01 正反倒置，主客角度轉(zhuǎn)換</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>申請方向：教育類</strong></li> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>素材方向：傳媒類</strong></li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">中文素材</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">我印象最深的是在學(xué)習(xí)數(shù)字繪畫的經(jīng)歷......首先是<strong>軟件的使用</strong>.....在解決軟件方面的瓶頸后，<strong>造型美感</strong>又成為了新的課題&hellip;&hellip;這段時間里對于<strong>畫作完成度</strong>我也有了新的理解&hellip;&hellip;從這段經(jīng)歷中我所學(xué)的不只是數(shù)字繪畫理論和技法，更重要的讓我明白了&hellip;&hellip;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">思路分享</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span style="color: #eb5757;"><strong>不論是PS的使用，還是造型美感與畫作完成度，都偏向傳媒中的媒體設(shè)計方面，與教育教學(xué)不相關(guān)</strong>。</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">單從學(xué)生的這段經(jīng)歷來看，特別是感悟部分，提綱的表述更偏向于傳媒領(lǐng)域，而非教育領(lǐng)域。但鑒于這是該學(xué)生的學(xué)習(xí)數(shù)字繪畫的經(jīng)歷，<strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">不妨轉(zhuǎn)換思路，將客體（授課老師）和主體（該學(xué)生）的角色進(jìn)行交換</span></strong>，弱化原提綱中&ldquo;我&rdquo;對繪畫部分的技巧學(xué)習(xí)和畫作理解，而把客體作為主體來思考，<strong>反思授課老師的教學(xué)模式和方法對于&ldquo;我&rdquo;學(xué)習(xí)的作用影響以及&ldquo;我&rdquo;（未來教育行業(yè)從業(yè)者）從老師的教學(xué)中得到的對教育教學(xué)的了解與啟發(fā)</strong>，與申請的教育教學(xué)類方向相匹配，也與下文的教育機(jī)構(gòu)實(shí)習(xí)（該授課老師教學(xué)方法的實(shí)踐）形成邏輯上的連接。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">英文成稿</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: center;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">When attending a CG Art course, Luobichengqi, given by ZHANG Lu, I was deeply impressed by his classroom mode <strong>as he explained complicated painting theories in an easy-to-understand approach with graphic examples</strong>. <strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">【授課老師（客體）的教學(xué)模式作為學(xué)生理解教學(xué)方式的點(diǎn)】</span></strong> Simultaneously, to deepen our understanding of painting techniques and familiarize us with different modeling design styles, Mr. ZHANG introduced the representative works of famous masters like Craig Mullins, John Park, and Jaime Jones, from which my painting skills and aesthetic level were greatly improved. <strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">【對授課老師例舉法的進(jìn)一步闡述】</span></strong> I valued this learning experience, for it <strong>developed my ability to explain profound theories in simple language</strong>, and, meanwhile, <strong>exposed me to a classroom mode with high teaching efficiency and quality, which I would like to apply in teaching</strong>. <span style="color: #eb5757;"><strong>【由授課老師的教學(xué)方式聯(lián)想到如何在自己的教學(xué)過程中提高教學(xué)質(zhì)量】</strong></span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">02 另辟蹊徑，拓展研究應(yīng)用</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>申請方向：供應(yīng)鏈管理</strong></li> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>素材方向：企業(yè)管理（電商）</strong></li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">中文素材</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">在本科學(xué)習(xí)過程中，我對社會化媒體情境下用戶創(chuàng)造內(nèi)容激勵機(jī)制研究值得一提&hellip;&hellip;<strong>我設(shè)計出適用于UGC背景下的激勵模型</strong>......（模型設(shè)計過程）我明白了我能<strong>把一個領(lǐng)域的理論成果應(yīng)用到另一個領(lǐng)域中</strong>，也算是創(chuàng)新&hellip;&hellip;此次研究也很大程度上促進(jìn)了我模型設(shè)計和數(shù)據(jù)分析的能力。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">思路分享</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">學(xué)生的這段經(jīng)歷著重在描述模型設(shè)計與建立的過程，與供應(yīng)鏈及供應(yīng)鏈管理的聯(lián)系都不是很大</span></strong>；鑒于提綱中&ldquo;將一個領(lǐng)域的成果應(yīng)用到另一個領(lǐng)域中&rdquo;的學(xué)生的感悟，從應(yīng)用層面思考該模型的新的應(yīng)用方式也不失為一種寫作方向。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">依托這種想法，<strong>在英文寫作中將建模的前后經(jīng)歷省去，著重從應(yīng)用面書寫對該模型的理解和感悟，從該模型在企業(yè)管理中的應(yīng)用拓寬到供應(yīng)鏈中對上下游企業(yè)的管理中以提高整個供應(yīng)鏈的效率，以此形成從供應(yīng)鏈知識面了解</strong> -- 供應(yīng)鏈管理面應(yīng)用的能力，從管理面更貼合申請專業(yè)。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">英文成稿</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: center;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">Simultaneously, supply chain management, in my view, hinges on effectively managing the supply chain itself and the people involved in this process. <span style="color: #eb5757;"><strong>（供應(yīng)鏈管理的管理面）</strong></span> Apart from my knowledge of supply chain, I have learned <strong>to manage people and affairs through my research on the incentive mechanism of user-created content in the context of social media</strong>. <strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">（由供應(yīng)鏈知識面轉(zhuǎn)向管理面）</span></strong>In this research, I constructed an incentive model applicable to the UGC background based on the Potter-Lawler comprehensive incentive model with the application of modern tools like SPSS and Amos. Having had a fundamental understanding of <strong>the incentive model that is widely applied in corporate management, I deem that it can also be utilized to motivate upstream and downstream enterprises in the whole supply chain, including suppliers, transportation agents, and distribution firms, to closely cooperate for the improvement of supply chain efficiency. <span style="color: #eb5757;">（從該激勵模型在企業(yè)管理中的應(yīng)用，引申到供應(yīng)鏈的應(yīng)用）</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;"><span class="h1">03 互補(bǔ)互足，專業(yè)性疊加技能性</span></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <ul> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>申請方向：醫(yī)學(xué)（康復(fù)治療）</strong></li> <li style="text-align: justify;"><strong>素材方向：偏文獻(xiàn)研究與分析</strong></li> </ul> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">中文素材</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">最讓我印象深刻的一次學(xué)習(xí)研究是畢業(yè)課題重復(fù)經(jīng)顱磁刺激在脊髓損傷后神經(jīng)病理性疼痛的研究進(jìn)展......(研究方向確定+資料收集分析+論文撰寫) 在學(xué)習(xí)《脊髓損傷康復(fù)》課程時便對脊髓損傷相關(guān)知識產(chǎn)生了濃厚的興趣......通過閱讀相關(guān)資料發(fā)現(xiàn)......關(guān)于重復(fù)經(jīng)顱磁刺激治療脊髓損傷后神經(jīng)病理性疼痛的相關(guān)文獻(xiàn)卻較少。因此，這對我的<strong>綜合分析、邏輯推理</strong>能力提出了極高的要求，這也會極大的提高后期論文寫作的難度。我<strong>獨(dú)立使用中國知網(wǎng)、萬方、SinoMed、Pubmed、web of science數(shù)據(jù)庫</strong>，通過使用......等<strong>關(guān)鍵詞進(jìn)行文獻(xiàn)檢索</strong>，并<strong>根據(jù)納入與排除標(biāo)準(zhǔn)進(jìn)行文獻(xiàn)的篩選</strong>，最終篩選出了三十余篇論文，通過分析歸納，我確定了文章總體框架，最終從......選擇四個方面入手，分點(diǎn)闡述相關(guān)內(nèi)容，完成了<strong>綜述論文的撰寫</strong>。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">思路分享</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">學(xué)生的類似科研經(jīng)歷，由于都是對某方面研究的一些分析，而不是自己具體的產(chǎn)出，且側(cè)重點(diǎn)在于文獻(xiàn)研究、收集及分析上，在這樣的情況下，基于學(xué)生在康復(fù)治療領(lǐng)域有一定的工作經(jīng)驗(yàn)以展現(xiàn)其專業(yè)能力，就不再著過多筆墨去闡述該學(xué)生相較下專業(yè)度不夠的本科經(jīng)歷，而是將重點(diǎn)擺在類似研究經(jīng)歷中體現(xiàn)出的技能型優(yōu)勢來展現(xiàn)學(xué)生在未來研究生學(xué)習(xí)、工作甚至終身學(xué)習(xí)方面的可持續(xù)性，與上文的專業(yè)性能力形成互補(bǔ)，綜合體現(xiàn)學(xué)生的全方面的能力。</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: center;"><strong><span style="color: #1890ff;">英文成稿</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: justify;">&nbsp;</p> <p style="text-align: justify;">From a more comprehensive aspect, I believe that therapists with promising prospects should keep abreast with theoretical and technical development in the rehabilitation field, which requires them to <strong>possess high-level research skills and learning competence</strong> to better apply the latest achievements to improve treatment effectiveness and efficiency. <strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">(在前幾段說明作為治療師的專業(yè)能力之后，這一段開頭點(diǎn)明對其在其他能力方面的要求，接下來通過本科研究闡明)</span></strong> Hence, during my undergraduate studies, <strong>I threw myself into assorted projects to sharpen my integrated research skills and broaden my horizons</strong>. From my module projects..., more than updating my understanding of rehabilitation and corresponding treatment methods, I have been skillful in <strong>applying what I have acquired to practical use</strong>. <strong><span style="color: #eb5757;">(學(xué)以致用的能力)</span></strong> Moreover, it is also worth mentioning that in my graduation design, I conducted in-depth research on the advances in the application of repetitive transcranial magnetic stimulation (rTMS) in neuropathic pain after spinal cord injury, <strong>during which I took the strength of varied databases</strong> ... to gain data support for my research...Through research projects like these, <strong>I became more experienced in information collection, processing, and analysis, and had my logical thinking and analytical skills enhanced. <span style="color: #eb5757;">(技能方面的提升)</span></strong></p> <p style="text-align: center;"><br /><img style="width: 808px; height: 188px; margin-left: auto; margin-right: auto; float: none;" src="https://info.compassedu.hk/sucai/content/1679471306979/1679471306979.png" width="808" height="188" /></p>